For everyone who looked at my site..thanks for the constructive critizism.
Name: a poetry lover
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:14:25 GMT-12:00 2006
Absolute crap.
Name: a person of taste
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:21:17 GMT-12:00 2006
Juvenile rubbish, should have flushed it down the pan.
thanks...
thanks...
icebloo wrote: For everyone who looked at my site..thanks for the constructive critizism.
Name: a poetry lover
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:14:25 GMT-12:00 2006
Absolute crap.
Name: a person of taste
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:21:17 GMT-12:00 2006
Juvenile rubbish, should have flushed it down the pan.That's a shame.
Name: a poetry lover
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:14:25 GMT-12:00 2006
Absolute crap.
Name: a person of taste
Email:
Date: Tue May 9 09:21:17 GMT-12:00 2006
Juvenile rubbish, should have flushed it down the pan.That's a shame.
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chonsigirl
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thanks...
Ice, write your poetry and do not worry what others say.
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thanks...
but they were from ppl here...is my poetry really that bad?
Start anew
Feeling the pain,
Knowing that you deserve it.
Not one tear falls. My eyes start to strain,
the pain is worsening. My adreniline can not fit
inside of me anymore. I must refrain
from a piercing scream. Like a slap across the face, it hit
with a sting. Not one grain
of happiness is left. Why do I inflict
this upon my self? Why am I never sane?
Something clicked,
my tears came pouring down. I drain
myself of hope. I have mimicked
what I wish not to be. So much pain and yet not one gain.
Why do
I do this?
I sue
myself of happiness. I miss
how I used to be. Against my will, I grew
and changed into a horrible person. I diss
myself every chane I get. I knew
then, not to
do this, not to put myslelf down, yet it flew
in one ear, out the other. Tell me, how do I start anew?
Start anew
Feeling the pain,
Knowing that you deserve it.
Not one tear falls. My eyes start to strain,
the pain is worsening. My adreniline can not fit
inside of me anymore. I must refrain
from a piercing scream. Like a slap across the face, it hit
with a sting. Not one grain
of happiness is left. Why do I inflict
this upon my self? Why am I never sane?
Something clicked,
my tears came pouring down. I drain
myself of hope. I have mimicked
what I wish not to be. So much pain and yet not one gain.
Why do
I do this?
I sue
myself of happiness. I miss
how I used to be. Against my will, I grew
and changed into a horrible person. I diss
myself every chane I get. I knew
then, not to
do this, not to put myslelf down, yet it flew
in one ear, out the other. Tell me, how do I start anew?
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chonsigirl
- Posts: 33633
- Joined: Mon Mar 07, 2005 8:28 am
thanks...
Ice, there are numerous poetry sites where fellow writers can critique your works. Everyone doesn't read and comment on poetry here, but on the numerous threads. If you want some links to poetry sites, PM me and I will send you some where I post.