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guppy
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pinky you have outdone yourself on this one....its very moving.....
K.Snyder
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That was very good...

But you probably don't need me to tell you that...
sofkeli
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really great work..

love your use of words and the melodic flow...and it's cohesive and effectively moving as well. excellent :)
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Pinky;592065 wrote: I'd all but forgotten that smile -

that sunny veneer

You were shut from my mind

yet you chose to reappear.

You were unexpected

both then and now

at my most unprotected

I resolve to remain unaffected.

It struck me like bolt of lightening

setting the world alight again

It's almost frightening

that I so readily regress to when

I first saw your face

that beautiful face -

so different now,

so out of place.

You're so alien to me now

yet we're still the same

two wild, unfettered spirits

that the world can never tame

Too challenging to each other

yet too sane to give in

it's equal pain and pleasure

to know what might have been.
Love the words and can read the thruth behind them......well done x
Women are bitchy and predictable ...men are not and that's the key to knowing the truth.
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The best so far kiddo.


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